一、句子開頭多樣化
英語是一種句型結(jié)構(gòu)靈活多變的語言。由于拘泥于傳統(tǒng)語法框架,許多初學寫作的人都喜歡用名詞開頭寫句子。這樣寫倒是無可非議,但若通篇文章都是干巴巴的同樣結(jié)構(gòu)的句子,就顯得呆板生硬,缺乏生氣了。事實上,在英語寫作中除名詞可放在句子的開頭外,許多其它詞類及詞組均可放在句子開頭的位置。
例句:Women leave their homes to take a fuller part in society as time passes。
上面這句話至少還有兩種開頭方式:
1. As time passes, women leave their homes to take a fuller part in society。
2. To take a fuller part in society, women leave their homes as time passes。
二、避免一個“I”寫到底
初學英文寫作的人的另一通病是一個“I”寫到底,句首僵硬,缺乏變化。
試讀下面這段文章:
One thing in particular I remember made me feel grateful toward my mother was that one day I went and asked her for my own garden, and she let me have my own little plot. I love it and take care of it well. I loved especially to grow peas. I was proud when we had them on our table. I would pull out the grass in my garden by hand when the first little blades came up. I would patrol the rows on my hands and knees for any worms and bugs, and I would kill and bury them。
上面這一段共用了八個“I”。當然上文若出自一個幼童筆下,倒不乏天真純樸的趣味。
不妨改寫如下:
According to my recollection, one thing in particular that made me feel grateful toward my mother was the day I went and asked her for my own garden, and she did let me have my own little plot. I love it and take care of it well, especially the growing of peas. Having them on the table made me proud. I would pull out the grass in my garden by hand when the first little blades came up and would patrol the rows on my hands and knees for any worms and bugs, killing them and burying them。
改寫后的段落僅有三個“I”,一看就出自成人手筆。
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